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Tonight is in his arms,
Coaxing sweet something I can't pin down
But something's never nothing with this
Light in his eyes.
Strong hands, but he stumbles
Under too much dark.
Painted up in black and blue
He is shattered hope and broken bones
So I'll hold him
Together.

Clandestine eyes are mirrored
In sunglassed glossy conversation.
Is this masquerade unending?
Sparks are sparks,
And seeing's not conceiving
When the tempest's underground.

Naked eyes spread the pain
From his half-heart to mine across
One congested room
Like a contortionist's promise,
Like an elasticated silence
Snapped

Or a vow of sonance.
I break first
But he holds and

Holds a little too long in beautiful adamance
Until time is snatched
And darkness resumes.
I cannot get this right.
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b1gfan Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2008  Student Writer
the play with the darkness helps unify the poem :) within and without, uner and around ...:D
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flashgrilled Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
This has a certain uniformity to it, I really like the way you've written it- even if the subject is a little distressing or alludes to misgivings. Did you have a reason for writing this at all?
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DifferentLikeYou Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2008
It's about a relationship that I know can't happen but I can't let go of the hope. I'm fairly sure he feels the same which only makes it harder.
I can't get this poem right, it's not saying what I want it to.
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